30 Comments to “The jade pendant”

  1. Moses

    Aug 31st, 2012

    :| ….sub dhoka hai mere dost!

  2. Wafa

    Aug 31st, 2012

    That's a perfect story. Why don't you try for a novel?

  3. @Afrin_Abbas

    Aug 31st, 2012

    kia imagination hai! :p

  4. Nida Ghazanfar

    Aug 31st, 2012

    Nice!! :)

  5. Anum Batool

    Aug 31st, 2012

    I find little cuteness and much warmth in it. Deep imagination! :)

    I would suggest you to re-read it for few spelling/typing errors.

    • ali488

      Aug 31st, 2012

      thank you anum… i know the warmth part.. but glad that you spotted the cuteness too.. will def re-check for typos

  6. Samreen Javaid

    Aug 31st, 2012

    wah ali … :)

  7. Samreen Javaid

    Aug 31st, 2012

    I'm waiting for its sequel episode :)

    • ali488

      Aug 31st, 2012

      not sure if there will be a sequel to this… but thanks for suggesting :))

      • Samreen Javaid

        Sep 1st, 2012

        yes … i m from that bunch of nafsyaatiz jinko twist nazar na aye to ending ending he nahi lagti.. :P

        • ali488

          Sep 1st, 2012

          han han tm tou apnay he party ki ho.. but no i dont think there will be a sequel.. let there be hope for a good end.. even if in imaginations

  8. afshan

    Aug 31st, 2012

    wow ali ! I never knew you can write such pieces as well ..i mean thats not your genre (thanks for spelling BTW) :D Well done !

    • ali488

      Aug 31st, 2012

      hahahah never mind the spelling afshan.. glad that you liked it.. and yes you are correct I have rarely written in this genre :)

  9. Munis

    Aug 31st, 2012

    very very nice I imagined this story quite well in my head ! :)

    • ali488

      Aug 31st, 2012

      thanks munis.. i always try to capture attention by creating the scene as detailed as possible..

  10. Sumaira Ahmed

    Aug 31st, 2012

    really nice ali… never knew you could write abt such stuff too! impressive i must say!

  11. osama

    Aug 31st, 2012

    good job. I liked it a lot.

  12. Zuhair Wasay

    Sep 1st, 2012

    Simple but not stereotyped. Nicely done :)
    This some how reminded me of Twilight. Don't know if it's a good or a bad thing :p

    • ali488

      Sep 1st, 2012

      oh dear God! not twilight… why did you said so .. iv never read twilight but i understand… sigh. Thank you for the appreciation :)

  13. sadia zaheer

    Sep 1st, 2012

    its short, simple and beautiful story… :)

  14. Fatima

    Sep 8th, 2012

    nicely written :)
    close enough Ali


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